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Monday, January 08, 2007

 

Ode

when it had turned its face to june
we talked about the amber moon
and my home slice left me hanging
like a silver scaled fish
and the hole's still in my tongue
so all the words fall through it
but where the hook is i can't say
he up and took the hook away
the hole in the clouds is a bloody gash
and the sand on the beach upsets like a rash
but still i hold onto a bag full of ash
cause one man's trash is another man's trash trash trash

Comments:
You melted my little heart.

fantastically brilliant linebreak: "ane my home slice left my hanging/like silver scaled fish"

gigantically strange image: "the hole in the clouds is a bloody gash"

Again, you put the rest of us art producing youth to shame . . .

Could you please record yourself reading this so that we could one day maybe use it for something?
 
yes yes, this is really amazing. i'd love to pick out a favorite part, but like brandon did, i'd probably quote half the entire thing! i love the homeslice line. the words falling through the hole. holding onto a bag of ash. all of it!

wonderful.

i wish i had a way with words. i can only barely speak.
 
is the home slice who I think it is?
 
probably not because i wrote this in an ichat to morgan fox because he was not responding to me. thanks boys. i blush.
 
the fact that you wrote that in ichat, spontaneously, so spur of the moment, makes me even more in awe of you and this ode.
 
aww. wonderful, of course.
 
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